We whispered to the boy, "Drop the bag and hurry. The rebels are coming.
Six of them were trying to escape by crawling over dead bodies. As they were crawling something fell out of someones pocket and fell onto an aluminum pan. The rebels started to point there gun towards them. One boy from the town carried a big bag of things he had gathered from his house. The rebels saw him and opened fire. We whispered to the boy, "Drop the bag and hurry. The rebels are coming. The boy didn't want to leave that bag. He didn't make it to the first crowed village.
The boy in this story must have had some items in the bag that had sentimental value to him. He really didn't want to leave that bag even if it meant him being killed. The boy knew that he may never see some of those items again. Human nature in a regular situation would be for us to drop the bag and take of running. It said that the boy didn' t listen when they told him to drop the bag.
Nobody would listen in a situation like that because that could be the last piece of memories they might have of there love ones. This is telling us that the boy had a choice. He could be killed or have memories. We don't know if he survived or lived, but we know he didn't make it to the village.
Justin,
ReplyDeleteA very insightful explanation here in your first response. Your idea of holding on to memories and how this is a very natural thing to humans is a great assertion.
My one suggestion has more to do with the language itself. You don't want to get caught up using the generic rhetoric of "everybody" or "nobody." Of course, in a blog response it might seem casual enough, but one thing you want to practice is more clearly defining "nobody would listen..." because that makes your point arguable.
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